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the "perfect" world

By katiemartin
27.04.2007
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	everythings perfect and quiet the world seems sureal the beauty amazes troubles can not be seen but somewhere there is a girl afraid and feeling alone noone too turn too no where to run the countrysidewith birds singing the crops starting to grow the lambs starting life in this ideal world but else where the girl wants her life to end for the confusion and pain to end and let the world be perfect without her the town bustling with people doing daily shopping with plenty of money without a care in te world because in their eyes everythings perfect but alone locked away from the world the crys breating into a bag,hyperventallating, and wishing the tears would drown her the perfect world silent but the sound of crying cannot be heard is it because they cant hear her or they dont want to .... she spoils the image she spoils the perfect world so block her out. the girl sleeps,dreaming that one day she will be included in the perfect world and stand tall and that someone reaches out to save her form drowning ... in lifes inperfections

katiemartin

584 days ago Reply

this is my first poem posted on here. im 14 so please be honest but not 2 nasty
thanks
x

Robin Brown

584 days ago Reply

It's pretty good for your first posted poem, Maybe you need a wee bit more decription in it other than describing how teh world is so more perfect than her with smaller details about that idea, but none the less Pretty words :) Keep p the poetry so I can read more of your work.

Josh Wolski

584 days ago Reply

If Im correct you're stating that people with money see the world as perfect.Those not fortunate to have this, are merely looked over and are purposely ignored for the sake of not having to deal with reality. Seeing how as there is no such thing as a perfect world.Life stays perfect with ignorance?

Josh Wolski

584 days ago Reply

Your poem is very meaningful to me. And you are right. Your writing is amazing. Once again thank you.

EmeryJoseph

582 days ago Reply

This poem is really good. It touched me. It sounds a lot like the poems I write. It also seems to be a bit like how I feel. "The sound of crying cannot be heard" is my favourite line in this poem, as it really touched me, and is very true. Keep writing your poems, cause I'll love to read them.

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