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ShutterShut

This room so cold and wet
Im having feelings mostly regret
Windows are shut locking out all options of choice
Im stuck her waiting in the dark for that voice
The room echoes with the sound of my breath
My steady heartbeat turns to a cascading mess
I hold in my hand a frame of the past
As is stare into this glass i notice the trap
Now i am surrounded by dominoes of path
Ive sent them falling i feel their wrath
As one hits the ground my head shakes to a spin
The past has won it has me pinned
As future cries out present weeps on the inside
My tears fall like missles they turn like sea tide
Im boarded in this boxed in room A closet filled with thoughts
The glass hits the ground the dominioes fall i see battles i have fought
Each one brings a new scar a new mark of the war
Im feeling their pain the way i am torn
The room weeps as one as i join the Crying crowd
inside this room it seems as if everything you need is in but nothing can be found

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tornheartsneverheal
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Good job.different but still pocesses your personal signature
 
jb1550
jb1550
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thanks you must know my personal signature by now you have been a great critic
 
tornheartsneverheal
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no,iv been a rating fan. :) lol. your in my faves!
 
jb1550
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haha well thanks it helps alot
 
Jessica_Robyn
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babe, you really are a good writer. and i really hope that you make a job out of it, continue writing through out the years your a very talented writer.... look at your level of talent now, and your only 15 i cant wait to read your poems to come......
xx.
 
jb1550
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i still have two to put on her so wait and enjoy
 
mqr53
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the song i made outta this is beastly yo
 


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