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Chance to be loved

By cactusinoasis
28.03.2009
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Love Poems
thanks love


	i was on the dark when you ask me out on my stormy life you guide my path without doubts you tear off my mask kneeled on me you ask for chance am I dreaming, as i whisper love was away beyond my year and here you are expressing your love my tormented heart now was glad there was healing amidst pain there was rainbow after the rain there were you who show me how to live and love start from now thank you for acceptance for trust and love at glance for caress I felt and see thank you for loving me...

JungleJim

358 days ago Reply

I like this one much.

Not being picky...but meaning to help....the first stanza you say "kneeled on me...." I think you might change that to "Kneeling before me...." Otherwise I love your beautiful choice of words and the feeling behind them.

It's nice to be kneeled! ...some guys have all the luck...they just kneel on a girl and they get them!

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